Sunset

SUNSET

The sun was setting and the whole street was showered in a golden glow. Sitting at the window, Alex was staring outside without seeing the beauty of the scene. His mind was filled with darkness; he felt only resentment when he thought of the accident. He didn’t talk about it though, he never did.

“Honey, you want to go for a walk?”

Alex turned towards his wife. He hated that she was still there, supportive as ever. He didn’t deserve that, she didn’t deserve the mess he was.

“It’s beautiful outside and you could use some fresh air.”

He loved her. Needed her. He wouldn’t leave, but wished she would. Just so he could be left alone. It wasn’t fair, he knew it, but then again, the accident hadn’t been fair.

Nodding, Alex got up and reached for the hand his wife was extending. He felt the warmth of her skin and felt gratitude for her presence despite all the darkness; the sun had set on his world a long time ago.

Word count : 172
Image : Louise, author of The Storyteller’s Abode.
Story writing for the 49th Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers (FFfAW), a weekly challenge hosted by Priceless Joy to write a ±100-150 word story based on a picture.
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34 comments

  1. He is lucky to have her be understanding. It sounds like a hard road for them both.

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  2. Oh how sad! The accident made him blind. Wonderful story! Great build up throughout the story – toward the twist at the end!

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  3. I love how you pulled this off without ever mentioning that he’s blind. Great stuff 🙂

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  4. This is wonderfully told. The mixture of feelings a person with disabilities feels when they can’t take of themselves and are dependant on others for help. He resents is because he resents his disability, however it happened. But at the same time he loves his wife and glad she is there to help him. I guess she really meant it when she said her wedding vows: “in sickness and in health.” Great writing I enjoyed your story telling.

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  5. What a beautiful love story. 🙂 Love it.

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  6. I like this story, it is very accurate of those kinds of relationships.

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  7. A beautiful story, Alixa. Losing your sight must be a dreadful thing to go through. At least he still has his wife’s support, even if he doesn’t feel like he deserves it. Really well done. 🙂

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  8. Beautiful! I like the light/dark dualism — very effective in the story and on the reader. I felt warm and then cold, and then warm again.

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    • Thank you for reading and commenting, I appreciate it. I wanted to create that contrast after seeing the dark sky over the beautifully lit street. I’m glad it worked out well! 🙂

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  9. Very well done. The last line is priceless. It carries so much weight. Whether blind because of disability or blame very effective. 😀

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  10. Beautiful narration and a wonderful story

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  11. Very unique take on the prompt. Well done how you waited to show what disability he had until the ending. I liked reading it. 🙂

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  12. Leaves us wondering about “the accident.” I think you described the guilt very well. 🙂

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  13. How very sad. I could see his pain.

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  14. People are blind in many ways. Your story shows that.

    Ellespeth

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  15. I love his feelings here, a mixture of needing her to be around but wishing she would leave. It felt very real to me. I hope one day he can come to terms with everything. Excellent last line!

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