REMEMBER
Do you remember the day you heard of this coastal city, hidden beyond mountains, where everyone is welcome? Do you remember what they said? That the sand was softer than any silk, the water was warmer than any kiss, the sun was brighter than anywhere else.
Do you remember how you went through hell and back? And how they looked at you as if you were wounded? You knew things would never be the same.
And so, you escaped, taking this grand journey towards this city that bred no misery.
Finally, you are here. You can see your havenΒ just beyond this path. You keep going with a steady pace until you reach your destination, singing with every step you take :
Never
Look at the sky
And wonder
If angels can fly
In this world
Where nothing
Seems to be
What it seems
To me
Never
Look at the sky
And wonder
What it would be to say good-bye
Just remember…
Looks like this is my 10th participation to the FFfAW (already!!) Again, I can’t thank enough Priceless Joy for hosting this challenge! I’ve met wonderful people here and I am enjoying every story written and read!
A little background for this one : I was inspired by a song by Sarah Blaine (Never Get to Heaven) and started singing in my shower this morning this little song above (with an open ending – though I have my own, because I love open endings!) My story was supposed to be all happy and jolly about travelling and finally reaching destination, but it looks like it took a slightly different path! Hope you enjoyed π – Alixa
Word count :Β 162
Image : TJ Paris, author of La vie est trop courte pour boire du mauvais vin.
Story writing for the 53rd Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers (FFfAW), a weekly challenge hosted by Priceless Joy to write a Β±100-150 word story based on a picture.
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I like that he found haven.
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Will it be all he/she hoped it would be? π Thank you for reading!
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Has he found Utopia? π Nice story! π
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Could be! Then again, life is always full of surprises! Thank you, glad you liked it, thanks for reading π
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This is wonderful, Alixa! I love that he made it through hell and back and is in the place where there is no misery. I also love the song that he is singing! Wonderful!!
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Thank you so much π The destination to a long journey π
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After I published my comment to you, it dawned on me… did he die and go to heaven?
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I did have death (more specifically suicide) in mind, but it is one of the many possibilities.
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Oh! I didn’t even consider suicide. In fact, I didn’t realize the city he was going to was heaven until after I had commented. I just thought it was a happy place on earth. LOL!
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Could’ve been, to be fair. It wasn’t meant to be obvious :3
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Okay. Thank you. I like that it isn’t meant to be obvious.
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Woah!!! First of all, your story is great! I love the hell and back part because it felt so real! And… what I found really fascinating is that we have the same title. π My response for this prompt is also titled ‘Remember’. π
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Thank you so much for reading, glad you enjoyed! Just read yours, which is great as well!
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Aww! That is so sweet of you! π
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I love a story that gets me thinking and leaves me wondering, and this one certainly did!
‘The Homecoming’ for FFfAW!
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Thank you so much for reading, I am glad you enjoyed my story! It’s always nice to know a story can let the reader wondering after the ending π
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Lovely story!
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Thank you π
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This is touchingly beautiful. So very well crafted.
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Thank you very much π
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